Dissertation Feedback
[00:00:00] Jumping off times, you move sometimes to move centuries. And that’s not clear about the main concern I had was still this ambiguity between whether you think the second phase of neoclassicism as you presented is still somehow linked or not linked with the emergence form of a national spirit or a national or a nationalistic kind of projection. You say very deeply. No, he didn’t. And the reasons for it is that because the the most comprehensive technical inference came from Germany. But that’s not necessarily enough of a reason, not just suggest that, but and other times you don’t say, This is the you know, after the empire, when there was this movement towards the unification of a sense of national unity. Inevitably, the type of buildings that you are somehow presenting linked to projecting a national identity. So for me, that ambiguity is really important. It is that that was not clear and is fundamental because in a way, for me, that was the biggest argument that you had in terms of justifying what we can for what is really important to focus on the architect that you’re going to focus on, to basically organize the analysis of his case study or the case studies that you want to analyze based on that overall argument.
[00:01:46] Let me rephrase. You seem from the review of the literature on neoclassicism enough in Greece, you discover that basically it would be worth analyzing how a certain phase of the movement is linked with the consolidation of a national Greek government and Greek national identity, then that justifies exploring the work of certain architects on that movement that justifies your architect. That’s one way of organizing it. If you say that it doesn’t, then we need a thread to actually understand how do we read and understand the involvement of your architect in that second movement. So that’s one very important general comment that you need addressing. [00:02:29] The other thing is that at times there’s a confusion or at which are noted down in the document, I send you the same confusion or reiteration as to, well, what do you. You put the methodological analysis or the methods chapter of your dissertation. Now you can have it on your in the introduction of the thesis. If you don’t think that’s big enough, well, you can have it as a Chapter 3 normally. Okay. Well, you discuss this lawsuit now from the methods chapter. What we want is an exploration as to what type of tactics you use to collect data in your case, you know, somehow discuss this very well in terms of, you know, the type of sources that you get and where you get them from. What are you going to do? You can expand by saying, how are you going to analyze them, particularly when you get to the work of your architects or whether that is going to be through his published work. He’s probably he’s archival material from his archive, etc. That’s one thing, but it should be much more straightforward. What do you do? Which in a way I got confused as to what I was reading. There’s at times you read almost like the introduction to the actual and critical chapters, but then you went back to being the methods chapter and I got confused, which I think does something that you can polish and not revise. I mentioned exactly on the comments where where that sits, but my main concern still is, you know, which I think you can do better is how you end or how you take the reader with you to this critical tension between getting rid of or including the issue of nationalism. On the second phase of neoclassical architecture. Okay. Yeah, that that’s a decision you need to make, which, you know, I’ll be fine with it. But you need to make this an improvement in the handling of the references that these things are quoted and referenced. Now, which is better. You need to be consistent whether when you’re using direct quotes or indirect quotes and how you reference. [00:04:30] And then what I would probably strongly encourage you when you get to do the empirical chapters is that you support yourself with the drawings or the pictures or the visual material that you get from your architect. Right. What? Nice thought. Mm hmm. Because I think that will help you in the writing process. [00:04:52] Another thing which, you know, it comes from the comments on the chapter is that. We don’t know. [00:05:02] What do you want to make from this analysis on their match reality on the program that you have? Because if you don’t associate the analysis of those components with something slightly bigger i.e. For example, with light years of national identities or public buildings or something that’s slightly bigger than that, then the argument by someone else, you say what? Every single store you. [00:05:30] Has issues that relate to watch a reality program. Unalike. [00:05:35] So there’s nothing inherently distinct about the material that neoclassicism, not in any of its faces, brings about with materiality. What you need to suggest is that when we look at those things, we can actually get a glimpse of how was it that neoclassicism by looking at those dimensions, we can infer something else. So I made myself clear. Certainly, yes. But your reality or the program is that we can then infer, for example, that there was a reconfiguration of how public buildings were being projected. Okay, that makes absolutely sense. Is he on? I see from some of the buildings, are you thinking of underwriting that could be relevant. So if you don’t want to tackle the idea of nationalist identity, there’s certainly an idea of public architecture that is linked to this phase. [00:06:30] Right. Theatres, libraries, museums. [00:06:36] Which I think are really of the time, right? So I think you might say, well, is by dissecting what’s happening within these time, measures are much reality, the spatial problems that we can actually then see how it was fundamental to rethink, for example, a new public architecture for Greece. If you don’t want to stretch it too, nationalist political identity by connection needs to be that. I think. And it’s slightly blurred missing. [00:07:07] What? What about the final chapter? How I do I conclude all this stuff, but I mean the conclusion of the dissertation? [00:07:15] Basically the structure of a conclusion for this situation is very rigid. So he has a part where you say basically the key findings of each of the chapters and you can go by chapter. So basically when I review the literature, I discovered the importance that the second phase of neoclassicism had on the development of a new public architecture in Greece. Through the empirical chapters, I managed to associate how these new public architecture was related to materiality, special borrowing and for each of these punks. [00:07:51] We explain what you mention. And then normally in a dissertation you have a subsection, we say the limitations.( So it’s normal. And he’s expected in a dissertation, we say, well, I had some limits. You know, you’ve got an idea. Well, I would have been able to do this or that, but I couldn’t. And I think, you know, further study, I could have done that or that. So that’s normal.)
You include the limitations, but not in a negative way. So, you know, always present in a positive lens. You know, I tried more time of that. If there wasn’t a pandemic, would have been able to do this or that, then it’s normal to have a future research possibility that is opened up by your research. So you say, you know, I think this research opens the possibility of conducting further studies on, for example, the evolution of public architecture in Greece, particularly thinking about the permanence of settlements in union. So, you know, you kind of invent from what you’ve done, and that’s important from what you’ve done. Mm hmm. The possibility of what could be the next study. Right. And that’s normally Nicole in it is in a completion for dissertation.
[00:09:12] And that and that will be, in your case, because of the work count. It shouldn’t be that long. Mm hmm. [00:09:18] We’re talking about 800 words of the conclusion.
Also write an abstract (a general introduction) to the topic of 300 words
The rest of the third chapter should be about 3000 words.
Please also correct the previous paper and upload also drawings that explain you sayings. ( I have uploaded the corrections on the word document by the name: Corrections of Dissertation).
Thank you.